Apr 11, 2010 at 6:28 PM
Join Date: Jan 4, 2008
Location: Lingerie, but also, like, fancy curtains
Posts: 3052
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I am dissappoint.
I really don't care about the patchwork quote going loco and murdering a certain someone, but I feel that you had such a good premise for a story at first, and now you're just throwing half baked ideas into the mix. The original idea was awesome. Quote fighting crazy stuff in a lab on earth, with no unneeded references to the original characters. It was unique in having just quote, and none of the dumb supporting cast. It was cool. Then, you gave the idea of a patchwork quote made by a crazy scientist person who was given quotes memory chip by kazu. This was also cool, because of all the possibilities it opened up, and the appearance of kazu was brief enough and realistic enough to keep the original vibe. The main awesome part of your story was still old quote fighting in the messed up lab and patchwork quote being weird in the den of the scientist/kazuma. Now you've shifted the majority of your story to after all this fun stuff happens, and as a poorly thought out mcguffin, you're trying to bring back to life a dead robot and kill yourself. Woo.
I might be the only person who really dislikes the way this is going, but please tell me why you changed the focus of your story so much.
As for weapons:
Nemmy - Real easy to make, if you had any fears about that.
Mine Launcher - Waaaaay to like the timebombs in original sin for my liking. I won't make it for that reason, but you could change this to a completely still polar star blast etcetera. Also really easy.
I am dissappoint.
I really don't care about the patchwork quote going loco and murdering a certain someone, but I feel that you had such a good premise for a story at first, and now you're just throwing half baked ideas into the mix. The original idea was awesome. Quote fighting crazy stuff in a lab on earth, with no unneeded references to the original characters. It was unique in having just quote, and none of the dumb supporting cast. It was cool. Then, you gave the idea of a patchwork quote made by a crazy scientist person who was given quotes memory chip by kazu. This was also cool, because of all the possibilities it opened up, and the appearance of kazu was brief enough and realistic enough to keep the original vibe. The main awesome part of your story was still old quote fighting in the messed up lab and patchwork quote being weird in the den of the scientist/kazuma. Now you've shifted the majority of your story to after all this fun stuff happens, and as a poorly thought out mcguffin, you're trying to bring back to life a dead robot and kill yourself. Woo.
I might be the only person who really dislikes the way this is going, but please tell me why you changed the focus of your story so much.
As for weapons:
Nemmy - Real easy to make, if you had any fears about that.
Mine Launcher - Waaaaay to like the timebombs in original sin for my liking. I won't make it for that reason, but you could change this to a completely still polar star blast etcetera. Also really easy.