Jan 19, 2013 at 6:08 PM
Join Date: Aug 9, 2010
Location: Greener Pastures
Posts: 1188
Age: 31
Okay so I've listened to the new org, and I think I'll go over pretty much everything I think.
So first, this song is alot like what I envisioned with my last request, the end thing and blah blah. I can see the sad here, but the sinister could use more emphasis. I think the reason is the background sound never breaks. That is, the song never really segments itself, everything just kinda blends together. It's a bit of a newer musician trait from what I've seen. You definately have made it so the sounds aren't sharp or unpleasent, but a composition element needs improvement.
The beggining is promising, but it doesn't go anywhere. It feels like it's missing a significant chunk of what it could be, which is disappointing. To describe this in one word I would say, almost. That is how it feels.
These are the words of both me and my music friend, I hope you can improve, and its great of you again to take on all these requests to improve your music.
So first, this song is alot like what I envisioned with my last request, the end thing and blah blah. I can see the sad here, but the sinister could use more emphasis. I think the reason is the background sound never breaks. That is, the song never really segments itself, everything just kinda blends together. It's a bit of a newer musician trait from what I've seen. You definately have made it so the sounds aren't sharp or unpleasent, but a composition element needs improvement.
The beggining is promising, but it doesn't go anywhere. It feels like it's missing a significant chunk of what it could be, which is disappointing. To describe this in one word I would say, almost. That is how it feels.
These are the words of both me and my music friend, I hope you can improve, and its great of you again to take on all these requests to improve your music.