Heh, I log with the sole purpose of patching that up, and here you are with a few tips.
Admittedly I did get the word for 'you' from a dictionary, it's been a bit since I've taken Japanese and I only had 3 years. When I first wrote this, I started to go for "I'm watching you..." but I thought the current translation would be a simple "I see you..."
Still, thanks. I'll go with your version.