So standard intro, nothing too much to harp on here other than needing a re-edit, minus that Misery look-a-like.
To give credit, it is a start-up screen, don't know how I feel about that S...
Make sure you fix the line so the type-thingy doesn't spill into the next line.
Also swearing... And I'm seeing that this is a reference mod, similar to a Markipiler mod that came out several years ago.
Standard Deltarune, what's new.
I'm worried this will be a csbd.
Also why is the door frame all screwed up?
And that's not even the fade-out effect either, that's the door frame itself?
Standard Polar Star, but now with dad.
Weird colors, it contrasts greatly with the rest, especially the orange.
[Insert Headman joke here]
I just missed a joke about sphaget and sauce, but you know what, that's fine.
I think this is an unnecessary rewrite, the original is pretty self-explanatory.
Because I too exclaim at lockets, and also level 2 colors, the transparency doesn't look right.
Now these are references I don't even get.
A painfully true message.
my reaction.
I feel these are still pointless rewrites that don't add much, even for shock value, assuming that's what you're going for?
This line actually kinda irks me, because it's simply now: "Like my brother"
And then move onto the next line.
I don't think this works because you erase the sentimental value the original translation was going for.
I personally feel that leaving out the line "He killed my brother" ruins the idea of Toroko being a lost little girl, who only has King to cling onto as her only "brother" of sorts, and removing the original line spoken really cripples the idea the original was going for, that she's alone and scared, especially with the loss of her brother; and just leaving it on the note that it did really didn't sit well with me.
But I digress.
What no dick joke?
Oh hey, it's that Misery wannabe from the intro.
I don't get why Joel's other streamer buddy? (From what I've inferred) is supposed to be Misery, 'makes no sense. And also your line goes off the text box.
The "Shit!" just feels unnecessary.
No, I don't want to see this secret, unless it's a brand new area.
Make sure to rename it to "SECRET OVER THE OCEAN" in the teleporter script.
So it's just another Egg Corridor? The level design is also too spacious and leave a lot to be desired in terms of decoration and set pieces.
It looks like a mess in the beginning, but seems to clear up pretty soon.
Having an enemy in those white blocks feel cheap and unfair, it should be reconsidered.
I can't say I'm not surprised.
Also this space seems unnecessary and more like filler, there's being too spacious and then there's unnecessary.
This makes the level design feel more forced than optional, the player should have choices and not just be restricted.
I do actually like the design of this facility, really nice work here.
Why Birdo EOR? Why not just EOR? The Birdo part is completely unnecessary, especially since I don't the context if there is any.
Well there's the dick joke I was expecting.
I was also looking through the script and found this? I don't know why it was added but there's no event that leads to it and no Jump flag either? Weird.
Pretty standard up to Igor, and I was expecting some joke, but meh.
Well alright then, the demo's done.
You could've also used <ESC or <INI, which are much more formal ways of resetting your game, rather than just crashing it.
Overall, I think this mod needs some work. The levels can use a redesign and the writing should be toned back, at least your rewrites from being overly "edgy". I think this mod has some potential for the idea itself, but it shouldn't be another csbd; try adding an original level, make some custom dialogue, add a new mechanic or be creative and rework an old one, the skies are the limit with modding. These hindrances can be avoided with some work, but can make your mod an amazing parody mod, add some more original jokes, go all the way with the characters, put them in their own world, really give your characters some motivation outside of "oh hey this is a CS-au", because I feel these, csbd-au's, are becoming stale and they don't hold up well against other mods that either have more original level design, writing, etc...
