New Song (Need Feedback)

Hello there.
I made a new song (with singing of course) and remixed it. Perhaps I will make more like these because this kind of style is fusing all of my usual stylistic devices, such as:

- Distorted organs
- Hard Industrial-like drums
- Noisy, gloomy, atmospheric sounds
- Distorted samples (done by myself) and distorted vocals
- Some kind of singing style that is related to rap
- Rhythms which are influenced by Hip Hop and Breakbeat
- etc.

I would be glad to hear some feedback because I might release this track and upload it on youtube for example. Note that it could be considered NSFW, since the lyrics may be too violent.


Link:
http://music.tile44....um%20Remix).mp3

Lyrics:
http://music.tile44....yrics/Krieg.txt


And an english translation (original is much better though):

Spoiler

[Innocent?]
[Innocent?]
[Innocent?]
[Innocent?]
[Nobody is really innocent!]

[That lousy biologicial garbage, the genetic residual waste of evolution, who calls itself society.]


Ill, ill humans what should they do?
Finding no peaceful hour to rest!
The mind and the sanity will last forever!
Poisoning your soul and stressing your heart!
Who needs logic and rationality anyway?
For most people it's already too late!
All I feel, I do and I know,
who cares?


More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!

More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!


[Nobody is really innocent!]

[We live in a society of looking away, of morally decadence, our cities are not dirty and flooded with garbage; Our planet is not poisoned or is just falling apart. No! It's the fault of all the intellectual bullshit, which is produced by the society, who spills it all over the world, the planet and is therefor poisoning our enviroment.]


Caught in the deeps of your thoughts,
your mind is hunting you down as it likes!
What is only a dream, what is reality?
It's already too late for this realization!


More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!


Your brain is working against your flesh and bones!
Is readying itself for the fury of death!
Is planing a murder against it's host!
And is unperturbed when it comes to resistance!


More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!


Knock them down,
hack them to pieces with the knife,
dismember their bodies,
and store them in barrels!
Egoism and ignorance
is making every human sick!
Set them to fire,
blow them up,
kill their children
and throw them into the tomb!
Disgusting humanity,
I will burning off you all!


More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!

More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!

More and your heart will tear apeart!
You are perfected hypocrisy!
You are the incurable lynchlaw!
You are in war with yourself!


[Nobody is really innocent!]

 

Honestly it's tough for me to listen to.

Hearing that vocals is the driving force behind this song, you can totally feel the powerful vibes (even if I couldn't understand it; translation helps).
The lyrics fit it I belive.
Distortion is heavy and lends to the piece well.
It is quite a dark and overbearing dark anthem of destruction. (Actually, fits as the complete opposite of an anthem so to speak.)

For some reason all I could think of hearing this is something like a Dr. Wily (from MegaMan) going on some kind of dark insane rampage.

This kind of song I'm not a fan of really (vocals with sheer power and distortion, kind of like metal, is not something I usually listen to), so I don't think I can give you a good answer on if it is good or not since my preferences are biased against it.
That said, I think it does very well with the meaning it is conveying.

I hope this helps?

 

Well, the lyrics are meant to be interpreted, you shouldn't take them literally. It is a harder to interpret the english translation though, than the german original.

Also it's not really about destruction, I think it's a bit more complex than that, perhaps hearing the original song will help: http://music.tile44.org/.Unreleased/S.%20P.%20Gardebiter%20-%20Krieg.mp3