Oh wow, for some reason, this mod took a long time to finish. Alright now for the little issues you have.
1. In the intro, "Likely" is spelled wrong.
2. There are some pieces of the tilesets that would suit more if they were in the foreground.
3. Dreamt was spelled "dremt".
4. The camera at around the spot in the prison focuses on the player too fast. You should set it to 16.
5. When you get the CD and go to the door that (I think) leads out of the sewer place, it says you have an ID Card, which is weird.
6. The Saw Gun makes a sound that isn't very fitting. I recommend changing it.
7. In Agriculture Area B2 (Or whatever it was), the "puzzle" is not well designed. It's more trial and error than anything, and I hate that. :l
8. Not enough health. D:
Anyway, you did a great job overall, and it was really lengthy. Great work and I hope to see the next demo.