A story about a character (Demo)

I know, the title is bad but I can't think of anything else.
This is a mod I have been working on for a while, and I am almost done so, here is a demo.
Click Me (direct link)

I will take any constructive criticism. If there are any bugs or errors please tell me. I will try to fix asap.

 

I know, the title is bad but I can't think of anything else.

Yea i think the name is the least of your worries.

This mod has 3 main problems:
• Cookie cutter maps
• Stolen assets from another mod (Specifically openCS)
• the maps custom made are poorly made

My advice is to redesign the maps to make them original and better, and use unique content.

 

Yea i think the name is the least of your worries.

This mod has 3 main problems:
• Cookie cutter maps
• Stolen assets from another mod (Specifically openCS)
• the maps custom made are poorly made

My advice is to redesign the maps to make them original and better, and use unique content.

Alright I will change that.

 

Methinks Photobucket might have done some breaking as well

 

Spoiler: Continued from part 1

May as well check the First cave once more.

Spoiler: Continued from part 1

The forums glitched out? I'm not bothering with that, moving along!

Make sure to remove the evil door once we kill it, took damage because of that......

So this time we use the PipeWorks key on the door.

Leads back here.....Yeah, same coordinate issue.
I was about to end this review until I realized I didn't go into the shack. Made this twice as long SO LET'S PRESS ON!

So now in the shack things are alright, stuff is broken as I expected and ooooh a trinket and a save!

Oh cool treasure, but what?

Hot dog, cool new weapons, a little forced to give it all at once but hey I ain't complaining. So we got:
-Spur
-Still Snake
-Missile Launcher
-Blade
-Booster 2.0
-Life pot
So cool, but what's next?

New door oh geez.

Well dang down to level 1, at least the spur is unaffected.

You can reset for more hp so that's a bit of a bug, I was 27 health but after resetting I'm now 48, yay.

So normal map, giant area so I'm a little suspicious.

Ooooh exp, perfect for the blade!

They didn't give anything......I'm sad now, but ultimately shall press on.

Path A (top path) Lots of the usual, a bat, lava and spikes, fair enough and simple to get past.

So uh bats spawn fast and this is a dead end! SO PATH B!

So path B isn't too bad, more bats......

A little tricky but hey that's what you do with spikes and lava.

MORE EXP AND TOO MANY BATS!

Too many bats and sadly no exp, a bug I hope that can be fixed. A little too much in the way of spikes but hey that part's fine, work on the bug for the exp.

Oh cool a boss, but where is it? Is it going to run in? I hope it's the red demon!

So Monster X comes in on top, that's fine, at least we can battle him, just lots of bats to take 2 damage from. Thank goodness for the life pot.

Racking up the damage, and also the projectile X fires looks like the Red Demon firing? I'm sure that's because of the sprite set, make sure to fix that if you can.

He won't go down, even with the spur, he's tough even with the booster, 48 hp (technically should be 27 hp), and a life pot. He's tough, then again lots of bats and X's in the air.

Boom yeah!

I'm glad you called it "Floating Monster X", I'll give you a plus for making that a self-aware joke, that was good. Also we're floating, yay, I think that's a bug? Up to you to decide.

I press forward in agony.

Trickery jump that isn't that easy, but it's a tiny bit too hard in terms of level design.

I'm scared I won't get exp soooo, yeah just tried it, didn't get exp, the blade will never get leveled, also just found out the enemies don't give exp, hearts, nor missiles, probably too many enemies to allow drops.

Random room? Found where some of the bats spawned.

Oh I found the blood drops, they don't work sadly. Too many enemies.

So just left the last room, and random Balrog? weird, but hey a save point and a health thing so that's cool.

Ok found out they're falling constantly, that's fine, at least they have a set spawn, hopefully.

Not sure if we're allowed if here, doesn't work? Maybe a bug?

Found the prefab house so that's good, can get some health and save maybe.

So a bug? Happened? I went in the Prefab house, was immediately shunted out......Let's see.

Sent me inside the last cave in some random location, coordinate problem?

Oh hey the blood droplets work, I guess because not too many bats spawned yet, a kinda glitch.

Cool map, the only issue is that weird thing to the bottom left, I doubt I can reach it, whenever I try to go far to left the game just insta-kills me. Weird.

Chaos ensues, and while I get exp and health now, lots of bats! I'd say lower down on the bats a little.

A one-on-one battle, yet I have the advantage.

Fell to my death, just like the original outerwall.......

The grave things were weird, they followed me down and were floating for a bit before hitting me, I don't think their programming really allows them to be here without glitching a little.

Life capsule hooray!

Scaling the wall, not much to say here, it's fine honestly.

Oh hey a cool mouth and eye thingy, with a bat?

Scratch that there's a bat generator above the eye. Minor glitch but still a little cool.

Cool a cacti, and a teleporter, so what's next?

Oh snap cool I did it! I made it to the medicine factory! Not what I expected but still cool, so the Korean (spoke poop last mod) is named Joe? Okay cool let's cure 'em.

Wait so no cure-all and we're bringing it to Chie? Makes sense that's fine. Also make sure when you "sai-d" put "said" altogether on line 3.

Sit here? Nah, Let's finish this mod!

Minor grammatical error here with the ".......teleported?Go in...." make sure there's a space in between "......teleport?" and "Go in........"

No sprite for our Kanpachi, that's fine, make sure to make an animation replacing Quote with Kanpachi going in the teleporter.

Oh that's not good?!

Well back at start? Am I stuck in the wall again!?

Ok cool, at least I now know how to use the plants.

Forgotten indeed, I don't remember this?! A hey a sign.

No?

Ooooh it's the first cave, that's a little clever!

And hey a life capsule I presume?

Well that's nifty.

Didn't know this lion was alive, and lots of enemies like in the First Cave after you get the Spur, forgot to mention that. (LOTS OF BATS, it's become a joke by now)

SN blocks, as long as you fix 'em it's a minor error we can all understand by now.

Oh cool a save point, let's do it!

Oh it's over? Dang.

Before we finish let's press on:

Pressing on more!

Bats galore! If you loved the bats enemy from the original CS, this is the mod for you.

Last Evil door!

And that's it. Fun mod!

Spoiler: Some jokes

Normal door leads to an-

-door.

No I have the key that unlocks Eren's basement.

(Replies in Spanish)

PFF, took the words out of my mouth, that was good. I'd say this text box is fine, keep it it's funny.

OH NO YOUR BOOKSHELF IS BURNING! Well nothing we can do now.

This poor sprite, it's just suffering slowly. Can't even kill it.

Even the Hermit Gunsmith wanted nothing to do with this mess.

Spoiler: Last spoiler I promise (final thoughts)

This mod has a good amount of potential and as long as you touch up the minor errors it can be a mod that can totally stand on it's own, there were parts I had fun mindlessly killing critters and all the bats, and while some parts were a little tough it was fun overall I didn't feel like my time was wasted. And on a little bit of the ironic scale it was fun, I had fun with the jokes and I hope you did it. While there were some spelling, grammatical and level design errors, I hope that as long as you understand what I said and put it to practice, then you can make a mod worth remembering! If I were to give it a score I'd give it 6/10; It has potential, but it's not there yet, but that's not bad, take the positives and the fixes to heart and improve the mod to new heights! Best wishes! -CCL

Unrelated last note, I think I broke the forums with how long and picture heavy these 2 posts are, removed 2 closing ellipses in my first part and screwed up in a bit in my 2nd part with spoilers and darkening some text. So oops.....

I will be sure to fix these bugs and errors! Also I couldn't see the photos from photobucket sadly

 

Methinks Photobucket might have done some breaking as well

My entire post was for forfeit, I want to die. UGH. Any better photo sites I should use? Because I want to help Epicmandude with this mod! IT'S JUST NOT HAPPENING THANKS TO PHOTOBUCKET!

I will be sure to fix these bugs and errors! Also I couldn't see the photos from photobucket sadly

Dude I'm so sorry about that I thought they'd actually work. You're totally fine, give about a day and I'll fix it as best I can.

 

My entire post was for forfeit, I want to die. UGH. Any better photo sites I should use? Because I want to help Epicmandude with this mod! IT'S JUST NOT HAPPENING THANKS TO PHOTOBUCKET!

use Imgur.

 

use Imgur.

Okay thanks! That moment I just remember I deleted them all off my computer....Got to download them and move to imgur.....this may take some time.

 

Okay thanks! That moment I just remember I deleted them all off my computer....Got to download them and move to imgur.....this may take some time.

It's fine, take your time.

 

Meh. Level design isn't good in my opinion.

 

this is just a remasterd version of poop story

 

fyi there are no 45 degree slopes in CS by default
the ones that look like they are 45 degrees are not they are to a 30 degree slope not a 45 degree slope

if i need to elaborate i can but i doubt ill need to
i always struggle with describing slopes

on another note i really hope "poop story" isn't an actual mod. if you're gonna insult someone and their mod, do it in a way that poses you mature enough to actually use a forum. potty humor and namecalling should not be used, but rather logical reasoning and actual criticism

this is just a remasterd version of poop story

 

fyi there are no 45 degree slopes in CS by default
the ones that look like they are 45 degrees are not they are to a 2,1 slope not a 1,1 slope

if i need to elaborate i can but i doubt ill need to
i always struggle with describing slopes

So they're 30° slopes instead of 45° slopes, you mean?

 

So they're 30° slopes instead of 45° slopes, you mean?

yeah thats exactly what i meant...
by im not good at describing slopes

but yea thanks for correcting me

 

fyi there are no 45 degree slopes in CS by default
the ones that look like they are 45 degrees are not they are to a 30 degree slope not a 45 degree slope

if i need to elaborate i can but i doubt ill need to
i always struggle with describing slopes

on another note i really hope "poop story" isn't an actual mod. if you're gonna insult someone and their mod, do it in a way that poses you mature enough to actually use a forum. potty humor and namecalling should not be used, but rather logical reasoning and actual criticism

oh poop story does exist alright cavestory.org/forums/threads/the-wrath-of-feces-aka-poop-story.6001/