Piano Criticism.

Gah i can't find anyone to tell me what I should fix, so here:
Palm Brinks (Piano).mp3
What do I need to fix to make it sound better?

Also: I'm playing it by ear (I did check GIR's org for reference once ), so if I play a note wrong, feel free to point it out.
Thanks!

 

What song is that?

 

It is Palm Brinks, from Dark Cloud 2 (aka Dark Chronicle 2)

 

I'll have a listen once I get back to mah dorm, since I'm in class now.

 

I'll have a listen once I get back to mah dorm, since I'm in class now.

Woo actual criticism is welcomed, as opposed to "what song is this?"

 

yeah so remember what I said in IRC?

without that, it barely sounds like Palm Brinks to me.

 

I for one thought it sounded nice!

 

yeah so remember what I said in IRC?

without that, it barely sounds like Palm Brinks to me.

Palm Brinks has no sustain pedal....?

 

Slower and more calculated (seriously, it's way too fast).

Also I'd recommend for the bass line using an octave rather than just the one key (like both the C you're using and then the C below it at the same time). It can be a tricky since then your left hand has to jump up to the Eb and G, but it isn't too hard with a bit of practice.

Also at around 0:25 the notes in the right hand are off for those 2 chords.

But ya if you go about it slower (and maybe with some pedal), you could add more emotion to the piece.

 

Your playing seemed quite nice, but I've never heard the original Palm Brinks so I can't really compare. My only criticism (which has nothing to do with you or your playing, but rather the composition of the piece) is that the repetition of the Eb/G in the left hand is a bit overdone imo.

 

Thanks for the suggestions fellas!
I will definitely play it slower, and fix any wrong notes.
Also, I am playing this on an electric keyboard, making it hard to put much emotion into it.
I will record it on a real piano asap.

 

* Landon offers his piano.

 

Okay, time for a bump.

This time it's Calm3 (aka Sweden) from Minecraft. Not a hard song, but it is rather difficult to maintain a tempo and stuff.
Yeah, here.

Shouldn't have much to say here, I explain most of it in the mp3. I said um a bunch, whatever. Also, when I said "note sound" I meant note volume.
PS is the audio quality adequate? I'm recording on my iPhone.